TPO 34: Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site.
Education is one of the momentous issues each community struggles to improve its techniques and procedures as much as a government can. However, modern technology and its complexity certainty affect this subject matter. Although the Internet has, in turn, its drawbacks, we cannot forget its merits on education. While some people are inclined toward the opinion that thereby spending so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site, educating today's children is more difficult task than it was in the past, I personally take an opposite stance and subscribe that thanks to the modern technology teaching process and gaining information needed to be educated is easier. In what follows, I will further elaborate on my perspective.
The first and possibly the most important reason why I believe that educating today's children is more convenient is that social network provides children with the opportunity in which students can have an easy access to a pool of information, a great amount of up-to-date data from all over the World. As a result, today's students can get the information they need to be knowledgeable. For example, in the past, students have to use printed materials, most of which were outdated. On the other hand, having access to these printed materials were also hard.
Another significant point which deserves some words here in corroborating my notion is that today’s technology also plays an important role in students' education. For example, playing an online game or using social network can bear a portion of the education process in society. If an online game be targeted to an age group, the game can inconspicuously teach children some skills. Also, via cell phones, besides using helpful applications, students can be in touch with one another to discuss the problems they might have with the teaching class. In a nutshell, modern technology makes students more independent from their teachers and teachers have less responsibility for children’s education.
To sum it all up, by taking all the aforementioned grounds into consideration, we may logically draw the conclusion that not only does modern technology make children's education with ease, but it also provides a circumstance students can be more independent from their teachers as getting information from the Internet and learning valuable knowledge and skills from the child-targeted games or social network.
- TPO 31: Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 75
- TPO 34: Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site. 76
- TPO 31- Integrated 80
- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. 73
- TPO 30:It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 451, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
...es, online games, and social networking Web site, educating todays children is more diff...
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Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
... opportunity in which students can have an easy access to a pool of information, a great amoun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for example, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32383419689 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98768468306 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551813471503 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.23690067 48.9658058833 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.0 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261866619047 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767148781187 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117502895215 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156461620493 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981422469369 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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