Nowadays, as internet and high-tech products become more accessible, it is more convenient for children to acquire aboundant information and befriend with others online. While there are some merits, such as efficiency of learning, children can have from cell phones or social networking websites; there are more risks involve in. In my opinion, I consider education more complicated and hard for parents as well as teachers, the following are the reasons for my standpoint.
For one thing, children tend to accept and convince of any knowledge or information they receive from the internets. Unlike adults, who have bulit their own values, children lack of mature judgment. Take my 10-year-old cousin for example, she firmly believes that not having dinner is the only healthy way to lose weights. She disregards whatever her parents say and makes her parents rather worried about her physical development. Thus, it is harder for parents to persuade their children to believe the elders instead of some biased information online.
For another, some addictive online games are influencing children' lives. According to the latest survey, more than 60 percent of senior high school teachers admit that it is harder to make children concentrate on classes when there are cell phones surrounding them. In fact, few students even drop up schools and immerse themselves in internet cafe. Undoubtedly, online games have already affect students' formal education and put teachers in hardness of educating.
Furthermore, not only online games but also social networking websites have negative effects on children. Children are at risks of associating with online friends as they are more susceptible to online friendships than adults. Besides, it is difficult to distinduish a person's characteristic when meeting him online insteand of in person. Therefore, parents are having difficulties in detering children from stenagers appraoching them with unknown or intentional purposes.
To sum up, though using high-tech devices have advantages for educating, such as improving efficiency of learning and incresing convenience, there are more risks involving in. As far as I'm concerned, I believe that it is increasingly difficult for parents and teachers to educating children when they are surrounded by cellphones, onlone games and all types of social networking websites.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'affected'.
Suggestion: affected
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Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in fact, such as, as well as, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53994490358 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88375150399 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573002754821 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4475765258 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.722222222 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189036265984 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649249726229 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527425647837 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118009852264 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465970491851 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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