TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
In today's modern life, tankes to the technological breaktroughs and cutting edge innovations in every section of scence, the path of our life has altered dramatically. One of those advanced technologis is In internet. I parsonally subscribe to the view that high-tech advices help in education and also modifey it compeletely. I believe this for two maine reasons; in the following paragraphs ,y reasons will be elaborated in on more detail.
To began with, I cannot deny the fact that changing system and policies of education based on the modern's life demands, could be incounter with difficulties. In fact, childern should be teached by the new advents technologis and utilize them in the schools and education places. To delve more into it, cellfones could use as a devices that teachers inform students homeworkes and projects and wants them to be more in reallationes. For example, My son used his selfone for making a school project for his class, nether does ot distracted him from his homeworks, but he could use as the advantages of that for better working. this points indicate that with alternig the perspectives, its merites outweigh its demerites.
The other reasons why I believe that educating of today's kids is not difficult that past is that they fostered by their devices such as socil networkes, internet, and online games, to name but the handful. they are more capale than last generations. take a young childern as an example. they access to varius data and information before lunch to schools. I know someone who memorized all of the flags of countiries throughouth the world because he palys with on-line games that theach him this. sould we count on tech, we could take high benefiths of it.
drawing upon the reasons that mentioned above, althogh there are several expections that can be excluded from general ruels, I believe that educations is no diffecult today. not only is it atributed to beter educations, but also nutured them in prosses of learning.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02416918429 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78426288695 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628398791541 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.106292748 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8235294118 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82352941176 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119028005106 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362704186995 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399295055008 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682191427017 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428233302819 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.