Life has changed in last a few years and famous people are becoming more exposed to people through the social media. While some people agree that famous entertainers deserve more privacy; others not. Personally, I think that famous people should have more privacy. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Famous people have their own life. They deserve to live like others and not chased by people, and journalists. Most celebrities do a lot of activates such as shopping, tanning, and drinking coffee. Unfortunately, people grab their phones and take photos and publish them through social media especially with the new smart phones which everybody has one. As a result, actors start to try to stop doing outdoors activities. They travel to unknown islands or spend time in home. A good example is Paris Hilton. Last month, she visited The Maldives to spend some time with her best friend. She said in her Snap Chat that I will not publish anything for a while because I want to live my life.
In addition, popular people are not only deserve privacy but also safety. When you see television, you see that a lot of actors have their own bodyguards to protect them. This is mainly because they get hurt by people who do not like them or journalist stop actors during family time or social time to ask questions. These bodyguards prevent these people from interrupting their social live. Therefore, people need to give celebrities some space to live their life.
Frankly speaking, popular people want to get the attention of others. This is mainly because they will get more money. For instance, a famous actor usually wear not appropriate cloths in formal places such as Oscar. By doing that, a lot of people would talk about her and then she will receive more job requests. So, famous people who do these things they do not deserve privacy because that is what they want. On other hand, celebrities, who live normally, they should receive more privacy.
All in all, I strongly believe that famous people should receive more privacy than now. This is because they have their own life as well as they deserve not only privacy but also safety.
- TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8275862069 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3357030479 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496021220159 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6517063471 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.0 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217234729068 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666734300028 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567556531509 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145559897784 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496689399865 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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