There is no gainsaying that the great majority of people especially young poeple are inclined to know about the celebrities' prviate lives. There are controversial arguements whether people should pay less attention to private life of celebrities like famous entertainers and athletes or not. From my perspective, famous people like atlethes and entertainers deserves to have more privacy. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points oview.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that everybody is anoyed, when other people are curious about her/his private life. Famous like ordinary people need to a quiet live. However, the great majority of people are interested to know about the celebrities' lives and these individuals have numerous prblems for just doing simple things like goint out with their families. For example, last week one socer player that he is widely acknowledged in my country, went to a shopping center with his family. Some people asked him to take a selfi picture with them and he was forced to spent one hour for his fans. Eventually, his family left him in shopping center and came back to home. There is no doubt, he has a lot of problems with his family about these events. Therefore, well-known individuals should cope with enormous problems to save their families.
second point that comes to my mind is that celebrities lives have far-reaching effect on people especialy their fans. Famous people might have some mistakes like other people during their lives, but mistakes of these people have adverse effects on the society. For example, one of the famous singer in my country is an drug addicted and one journalist revealed this secret last year. This report endengered some controversial argument in society and the famous singer had plenty problems for some weeks. Moreover, some teenagers that were inclined to this singer, imitated his behaviour and they used drugs like him. Hence, it is not necessary that people know as much as now about the well-known entertainers and athletes.
Last but not least, although some famous people enjoy that the great majority of people talk about them, most of the celebrities have problem with this issue. In this respect, people and journanlists should to take care the most of celebrities concerns and respect more to these people privacy.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, famous entretainers and athletes are deserved to have more private life and publics should not be curious too much about these people's privat lifes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the celebrities') or simply say ''most celebrities''.
Suggestion: most of the celebrities; most celebrities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22249388753 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64712357621 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498777506112 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3209942597 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0362245456252 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0140092542684 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0141374968945 0.0737576698707 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0216817630728 0.150856017488 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138466284616 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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