TPO-36
The education is the powerful weapon which can change the economy of the country. It is the question of debate whether the government should spend money on the education of the young children or for the Universities. In my opinion, The young children are in needs. Also, If we make education habit for them, they will be more willing to stay committed to their career when they get into the university. I will elaborate my views in the following essay.
First and foremost, It is easy to develop interest and motivation in the children when they are young. They are new to the world, and their mind is flexible and willing to gain the knowledge from the surrounding. It is the best time to make best efforts to provide them the knowledge and wisdom. Once they learn and understand the value of the education, they will stay committed to the education, and when they enter the university, they will not require another efforts to motivate them to stay focus in the university. For example, when I was a child, I went to one of the best Government school in my city. From the school, I developed an interest in the maths, and I decide to become a Scientist. Since my goal was fixed at the young age, I did not have to struggle in the university for the motivation. In contrast, few of my friend who did not attend the better primary school were not interested in the academic in the university. Although it was the best university, they did not achieve advantages of it because they did not learn the importance of the education from the primary school.
Second, the young children are in need of education because they are vulnerable and immature. If we will not make efforts at this age then most likely they would not study even the basic. On the other side, the student who goes to university has many reasons to attend the higher education, for example, they have to support the family or pay the family debt, etc. The young children, however, need a spark of light to get bright in the education. If we fail to do it, we might lose the best talent of the children. For example, my childhood friend was excellent in dancing. She even taught me how to dance. But, to grow in it, she needed to go to the dancing school. Unfortunately, both of her parents were workaholic, and none of the ones took an interest in her skill. Now it is difficult to flex the body, and she is heavy. If her parents had taken an interest in her skills when she was young, she would become a famous dancer.
In conclusion, I believe a government should spend money on the education of very young children than for the universities due to the above mention reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
...the surrounding. It is the best time to make best efforts to provide them the knowledge a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cause they are vulnerable and immature. If we will not make efforts at this age th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53541666667 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55603775267 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439583333333 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5661946193 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7307692308 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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