Tpo 36
By and large, the areas that the government spend its budget is of importance, because it can garantee the future success of a country. The most of the government's budget comprises of the money that people pay as taxes and tolls. When in comes to this point, some controversies arise to what purpose should the goverment spend its money. Many hold that for the success of a country, the goverment should spend its budget on the education of very young childern than on universities. Personally, I disagree with the statement. In the following lines, I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response.
First resoan is that the people with university degrees have more important roles in a country's success. In this modern era, universities play a role of a bridge to have a good future career, which could affect country's future success. Only by having a university degree peole could take part in most critical jobs that have a direct result on the county. As who do not have a university degree usually do not have a influential career, it is better to spend money in the areas that cultivate influential individuals of a country. For instance, result of a study in university of Tehran, showed that major part of influential careers in Iran, occupied with the alumni of this university.
Second, universites are places that produce knowledge. Todays, technology is growing with an excessive rate, and most of the new borned knowledge, which could help countries to compete with their counterparts, comes from universities.So critical is the issue that could change future of a country. In this hectic world, only the countries have something to say, which have the knowledge to fullfil their own demand without need for help from ant other county. A good example of this can be seen in my country, Iran. In miliary field, Iran started to establish and reinforce universites years ago. Consequently, now, Iram do not buy weapons from any country and its production can fullfil its demands. This independeny interpret as a good success, only occured in result of spending much money on universities.
To bring everything to a conclusion, I thinks governments should spend more money on universties because of significance of the influence that people with university experience have on future of a country, and to reinforce the place of knowledge's birth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
...try. The most of the governments budget comprises of the money that people pay as taxes and ...
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Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many holds'.
Suggestion: Many holds
...e should the goverment spend its money. Many hold that for the success of a country, the ...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: IN_WHO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
... have a direct result on the county. As who do not have a university degree usually...
^^^
Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...a university degree usually do not have a influential career, it is better to spe...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...r counterparts, comes from universities.So critical is the issue that could change...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
... To bring everything to a conclusion, I thinks governments should spend more money on ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, for instance, i think, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04050632911 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89388683204 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491139240506 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0353701428 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.789473684 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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