TPO 36 independent writing
A controversy existed on the importance of higher education or education of all. Many people claims that government should spend money on universities due to high educated people can help a country become more competitive. However, in my opinion, the education of very young children is more vital. Young people’s education can influence the whole society on economics and safety.
First of all, to make every citizens take general education can eliminate illiteracy. We can tell that how literacy rate influence a country economically. If government do not spend money and advocate on young children education, many people will have no chance to study. To take my grandma as an example, she never had chance to go to school. When she was young, the number of elementary schools were limited. Schools were only for rich people or male. In addition to my grandma, lots of people during the era took no education which the illiteracy rate was high. High illiteracy rate can drive a society back that almost every industry need people to have the ability to read.
Secondly, young children being educated can make the society safer. Young people are easy to be influence by their surroundings, and school can provide kids a place to inform with correct value system. For example, when I was in first grade, teacher taught us not to steal others belongings and not to hurt other classmates. Because of the right information I was absorb, I never want to do something illegal after I grown up. Although not all the criminals are without education, and even a students with a doctor degree can be evil, to maintain young people with an accordance knowledge on what is right or wrong is crucial.
To sum up, it is important that the government should spend money on education of very young children education because it can make a country economically better and help the society be safer.
- TPO 46 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people 70
- TPO 21 independent writing 3
- TPO 16 independent writing 80
- TPO 13 integrated writing 80
- TPO 34 independent writing Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones online games and social networking Web sites 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... whole society on economics and safety. First of all, to make every citizens tak...
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Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'absorbed'.
Suggestion: absorbed
... Because of the right information I was absorb, I never want to do something illegal a...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...iminals are without education, and even a students with a doctor degree can be evil, to ma...
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Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y better and help the society be safer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93125 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67715304708 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3860177975 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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