TPO-37- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets (dogs, cats, or other animals), although there are better uses for this money.Use specific reasons and example
This new world becomes more complicated than before, and you need more skills and capabilities to succeed and have a comfortable life to live. Most of us need to know a little about everything, such as financial, digital world, health, and a lot more things. As a result, most of us can't master all skills that are crucial for life. There are a lot of reasons that people do a few works well because they are doing a lot of different things, which two of them which have great importance, which are elaborated hereunder.
First, in the past, lives were more simple and people responsible was completely clear some of them are farmer some are artisans, and they do their careers for whole life, they sold their corps and buy what they want. In contrast, nowadays, people should know much more fields than their past generations to handle their lives, but their knowledge is shallow in most areas. For example, if you are a farmer, you should learn little about trading, new ways to farm, about the digital world and etc. So, they can only learn deep about farming, but in other fields, they have only know the jest of the work.
Moreover, we have limited time and the world changing rapidly. It is impossible to become a master in every field. If you want to become successful in your favorite area, it is vital for you to know a little about essential skills such as how to use social media, cooking, and paying bills. For instance, if you are a woman who wants to become a great scientist, you may not have enough time to learn how to cook professionally or how to recognize fresh foods. But you can prepare simple meals. So, being amateur in some fields is obvious, and no one expects her to be a professional in every field.
To sum up, the complexity of this new world that caused you to need more skills for life and a finite time that all people have to learn these skills, it is clear as a day that you cannot be master every skill you need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ot more things. As a result, most of us cant master all skills that are crucial for ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 489, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...w ways to farm, about the digital world and etc. So, they can only learn deep about farm...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 578, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...ng, but in other fields, they have only know the jest of the work. Moreover, we hav...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45251396648 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32548568026 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497206703911 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6150353018 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.266666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123921455032 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041497684581 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323328411868 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07961327627 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162331614774 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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