TPO 39, Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern life, thanks to the advanced technological breakthrough, we all encounter with multifarious variety of job choises. however, there is a n active controversy over whether, today, it become easier or harder to find a job which could bring success and scurity to our life. I personally adhere to the fact that today it is more difficult than the past to find a scure job. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To begin with, Although new advanced technologies provide us with more facilities, it lead us to more compelxity in every sectors of our life, comprising the job vacancies. To a contaporary student, this is a laborious task to realize his potentials due to the complexity of the fields of study he began to educate. it can not be easily understood that what shuold realy work with in the future. Absolutly, follow some directions but after graduation this would be very hard to understand what is our exact responsibilty in each job position and which of them will provide us with more opportunity and job scurity. As a case in point, I would like to recount you a personal story. As I graduate from high school, I decided to study the major that I loved: literature. however, after some monthes I realized that it can not bring me a lots of job oppotunities in future. Then I chose to study French and German, in purpose of finding some good job in foriegn language institues. Nevertheless, three years later I altern my major to linguistics because it seems that for more scientific majars there will be more rewarding jobs. Until these current monthes I am still very confused about my future work life. As I mentioned before, nowadays, it is not an obvious matter for nobody.
Furthermore, if we turn behind and take a look at our fathers' and grandfathers ' lives, we figure out that, comparing to us, their choises were too straitforward. they had no online or distant jobs. they studied their beloved field of study, having graduated, they went to find a rewarding career. there were no need to sophesticated information and knowledge. Therefore, they entered to companies, without beeing worried about their life security and inssurance for their eldery. In today's life, our contract is not for more than two years and after that we sould prove our proffeciency to a new cntract with the same company. however, in our fathers' time the contracts were lifetime. Thus, once they entered to a company or factory, they insure their entire life.
Drawn upon the aforementioned reasons, in new modern age, finding careers which could lead us to a scure and successful life become too difficult. Not only in our time we do more effort to understand the prerequisions of each career, but also we have to signe a short time contract to the companies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81629373764 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8094784265 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141146474652 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372946146275 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409925089744 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885213415124 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426481640052 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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