The ways to encourage school-age children to get high grades in school has always been a controversial issue among parents. Although many education experts argue if it is a general truth that rewarding students with money is a great way to make them try their best, I strongly believe that this method has strong defects. Among countless reasons which can vindicate my viewpoint, I will pinpoint the three most conspicuous ones through following paragraphs.
The first point that juts out of the mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this subject is the fact that, this method will make children conditional and they will expect a reward for every duty they complete. In other words, a child who is getting money from his parents will be conditional in his mind so he will demand money for doing any of his chores. An example can illustrate this claim. Consider that a child who is rewarding by money to get high marks, why he should not demand money for brushing his tooth every night?
The second point that is worth considering is the fact that this approach will make the students to forget the main aim of getting good grades. The actual reward of being prosperous in school is gaining knowledge, not money. A noteworthy psychological statistics which was gathered from about five hundred adolescent people in Iran states that students who were rewarded by money in school years are four times less patient to have a career in science than those who were learned to try to gain knowledge just for being more lettered.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. Consider a situation in which the economical conditions of a family have changed during school years of a child and they can not afford to offer money to their child anymore. In this situation, the child does not have any motivation to do good with his grades and he will be disappointed. This indicates that encouraging methods which are dependent on a constant situation such as giving examples of prosperous people who graduate by high grades are better than offering money.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are many reasons and examples which can be persuasive enough to agree that offering money to school-age children can cause serious problems to them in their future life. Some of them are mentioned above such as; being conditional and having the wrong motivation to earn knowledge. But that was a story in a nutshell. Obviously, there are many other examples and details, challenging the claim, which are not debated here. All in all, parents should consider all destructive and constructive aspects of this approach to decide if it works with their child or not.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...mind. Consider a situation in which the economical conditions of a family have changed dur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87525562372 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58233548469 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488752556237 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5372222481 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.2 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.45 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256053411583 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784576170625 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542458795831 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148407282409 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243580408146 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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