TPO 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, education has played a dominant role in the indiviual's way of living. academicians are putting all their efforts to find the ways which can improve both the education system, and children efficiency to mak a better world in the future. there exsist the inevitable questions which has caused heated debate among academicians that is ''what is parents role to boost the training system?'' some people are inclining toward the opinion that paying to school for each good mark , whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I agree with the piror group. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explicate my point of view thorough outstanding reasons and provide some detailes to elucidate my opinion.
The most prominent point to be mention is that the education has a significant and undeniable task in one's success and happines. becuase of its important, states have the ministery of education. Consequently, there must be strict oversight of the schools. Sometimes some parents pay money for their childrent's grade. Over time, this action will divert schools from their mission; it causes some schools do not follow their aim and their instruction which goverments prepare them for make a advanced society. For example, my cousin , who call Zobin, eduacated such school. After a few years later, we heard his school is closed and their teachers were faierd becaus they apeal some extra money to teach better.
Another equally notworthy and exquisite idea that comes to my mind regarding the boost of children's score is that parents can encourage and give some peresents them. this action make a better feel and children learn that there is a reward for their good and decent operation. I beleive its benefites outweight the drawbaks. Also, children should be know there is a fine of their mistakes. In sharif university of Tehran, one of the most prestigious universities in my cuntry, a very reliable research conducted recently and it reveald that the majority of students who were cheered by parents are more success.
in short, all aforementioned led us conclusion that education is leading in people life and parent shoul be follow and help their authorities to achieve their goals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, regarding, so, whereas, for example, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17079889807 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69847854383 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608815426997 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.15377785 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7894736842 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262739436399 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690228028636 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719981639707 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141075825386 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674096076871 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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