Education system has almost always been valued by societies, even though there have been differences in the way they viewed education. Teachers as one of the important part of this system will be evaluated and also have been treated with different attitudes. Some people believe in the past teachers appreciated more in comparison with today, others would disagree. In my view, I definitely disagree with the statement and think nowadays teacher are more respected with admiration. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into most conspicuous reasons and examples.
First of all, today, Social media becomes more advanced and modern teachers can make more contributions to society. With the help of social media such as Instagram, Twitter and Facebook, parents also could broadcast their honor for their children's teachers. Almost all people in society have access to these social media and recognize teacher’s adorable position. For example, my brother is teacher. He teaches sport for high school and elementary students. As he tells me, his student's parents post a lot of photos about their kid’s achievements in sport in Facebook and also tag my brother account into these photos. Hence, as these photos become more and more published, my brother feels more and more proud of his students and also himself. This example clearly indicate that nowadays teachers appreciated more.
Secondly, in advanced society, as everybody knows, education becomes more valuable because of its effects on children to achieve better future career. The authorities now understand how influential the teachers are in this system as they are the ones who should be well taken care of, financially and mentally, in order to perform quite well in their assigned position. Therefore, as values of education become increased, teachers positions in society will be more valued. For instance, when I was a child and went to elementary school, I remember there was only one or two days per a year which parents and teachers had a meeting. But today, in my nephew’s schools, there is a monthly gathering for parents and teachers. As this contribution increase, the relation between people and education system would raise. Hence, teachers feels their works and their responsibilities attended more. So it is crystal clear that today’s teacher feel more appreciated.
To sum up, by help of advanced social media and increase the value of education in society, I reinforce my view that teachers are more valued today than past.
- TOEFL TPO 48 Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 77
- TPO 45 independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use s 76
- TPO 44 Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 84
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...dia such as websites, twitter, Facebook and etc. parents could broadcast their honor for...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...as websites, twitter, Facebook and etc. parents could broadcast their honor for their c...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...hers. Almost all people in society have an access to these social media. For example, my ...
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Line 5, column 731, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this contribution' or 'these contributions'?
Suggestion: this contribution; these contributions
... gathering for parents and teachers. As these contribution increase, the relation between people a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23232323232 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72596770123 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1492532118 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0869565217 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2173913043 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18531495299 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600646683745 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532153086993 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131292126386 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367822008739 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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