TPO 45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading is about possibility of bee’s existence since 200 million years ago. It states provided three reasons of support about skeptical doubts over nests found inside the fossilized trees were not created by bees. In the lecture, the professor holds a totally different views that it is possible for bees to be exist such a long time and point to inaccuracies to each of the author's reasons.

First of all, the article claims that age of oldest founded fossil of bee is just about 100 million years ago. The professor refutes this point by saying also it’s true that there is not a 200 million years aged fossil of bees, it doesn’t mean that bees didn’t exist at that time. She says since there were almost no trees producing the right kind of resin, a sticky liquid produced by trees, the bees could not be preserved.

Secondly, the reading posits that there were not flowering plants 200 million years ago. On the other hand, the professor explain that relation between bees and flowers might be different in that period. As she says, bees in that time could feed on none flowering plants. After a while, as flowering plants evolved, bees adopted to feed on them and the relation between them have remained constant ever sense.

Thirdly, the article asserts that fossilized structures founded lacks some details such as caps. However, the professor says that there is chemical evidence that support the resemblance of founded fossil and modern bees. She explains that by the analysis of fossils, it turned out that they contain the same kind of waterproofing material that’s used by modern bees.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the oldest'.
Suggestion: of the oldest
...rst of all, the article claims that age of oldest founded fossil of bee is just about 100...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92700729927 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33489947415 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536496350365 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8746948599 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.846153846 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806108306828 0.272083759551 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311167808026 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0232073164112 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510799523824 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230955319331 0.0443174109184 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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