Nowadays, the issue of education and importance of teachers in shaping society has proven to be a pressing issue. Even though some people think teachers were appreciated more in the past, others do not agree with them. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight; In that, not only has the level of society’s awareness been raised, but also the level of welfare for teachers have been raised too. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is provided below.
The first reason which should be considered here is Society have been more aware of importance of education. It is an undeniable fact that parent care more attention toward their children’s education and they know how much their teacher can effect that; So they do everything to make their children’s teacher happy. Take a personal experience as an example; We were five children in the family and we were actually poor. So my parent had to work for long hours. my father did not even know where is my school and how were my grades. But now one, parent know and pursue everything about their children’s education, from their grade to what books they should read to prepare much better for their exams. Besides that, media care more about teachers. By study show how education can effect one society, different media try to care more about education and how teacher can have vital role in shaping society’s new generations. So by showing and caring more about teachers, media try to focus more on the important role of teachers.
One should consider this point from another angle, which is level of welfare for teachers has been raised. First, their salary has been increased compare to thirty years ago. My father, who is mechanical engineer, says when I started my work, I liked to be a teacher but the salary was so low, I had to change to engineering. But now on, my father states, there is not that much difference between teaching salary and, for instance, engineering. On the other hand, there are so much facility around country to make teacher more pleasant. There are so much facilities in my town just for teacher, such as pool, club or restaurants. At the same time, they can use facilities such as hotel to travel around country with low prices. So this kind of facilities is not about money; but it is, more importantly, about how society and government want to appreciate teachers. One could easily conduct correlation between level of satisfaction and productivity of one employee, which is in this case teachers. So by making teachers more praised, they care about their job much better.
In a word, by taking all of the aforementioned reasons into consideration, it is rational to draw the conclusion that there is so much more appreciating toward teacher than before. It is important to realize that by making our teacher happier and satisfied, we have better education systems and well-educated children to make better future for our country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ake teacher more pleasant. There are so much facilities in my town just for teacher,...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, so, well, for instance, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93069306931 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77336895053 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485148514851 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9640543395 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160599361047 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526908762431 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509369661434 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118443711212 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492422943738 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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