TPO 41 Independent writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, teachers have had pivotal roles in providing the necessary education for the new generation. They provide valuable insight for their students and pave the way for them to become successful citizens in the future. Therefore, without a shadow of doubt, their job has been indispensable and valued in all societies. The controversial question which arises here is whether teachers' jobs were more praised and worth in the past than they are nowadays. From my vantage point, the argument is true. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint though two significant reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that in the past the communities' circumstances were much different from ours. First, education in the past was considered exclusively for special members of society, and ordinary people who did not have as much wealth and position as they have were not allowed to study. The importance and value of education also influenced the appreciation of a teacher and everyone, even those powerful authorities, respected a teacher. Moreover, in the past, there were fewer specializations in the subjects and the topics were closed together. Besides, there were less educational institutes to train teachers. Therefore, if anyone wanted to pursue a job as a teacher, he had to undergo difficulties to succeed and he had to have a deep understanding about a variety of subjects in order to be capable of teaching. On the other hand, nowadays, most teachers focus on a certain topic and universities and other special institutes provide the prerequisite information and required training for teachers. Accordingly, as their job is not as much difficult as it used to be, they seem to be less appreciated by society than in the past.
Furthermore, with the advancement of technology and social life, other careers have been presented to the society which are considered of more priority and prestige. That may cause to neglect the importance and value of a job which has the same or even more value like teaching. For instance, in many countries, being a lawyer is considered a high-class job and compared to a teacher, a lawyer’s salary, as well as his respect and appreciation they have in the community, is much more. Moreover, technology has changed the way people acquire information. The mass of books, papers and other forms of information which is easily accessible through the Internet may cause people to think that the community has less need for teachers. Consequently, the public thoughts seem to consider less respect for teachers and since the public thoughts also affect the society, the society would be indirectly influenced.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that teachers used to be more appreciated by society in the past. Although the teachers still have the same importance as in the past, different conditions of social life in the past, as well as the emergence of new jobs in the modern era, have caused the society to consider less appreciation for teachers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...s much wealth and position as they have were not allowed to study. The importance an...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'neglecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: neglecting
...e priority and prestige. That may cause to neglect the importance and value of a job which...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2561.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13226452906 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00253105064 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4749498998 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0896716561 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.409090909 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230384980915 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727654990643 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619918301403 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152673781046 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380926532012 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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