There denying that parents play a significant role in their children lives. Parents can contribute to their children success by spending some time with them. However, if parents are super busy with their daily chores or with their work, they should spend their limited having fun and playing games with their children instead of doing something related to schoolwork. The basis of my views is because playing games and having fun can have a great impact on parents children's relationship and can have great benefits for both children and parents physical and mental health.
Fun has an indispensable effect in parents children's relationships. One of the most important effects is that Fun creates incredible good moments between family members that could last as unforgotten moments in the children's memories. For instance, even though my parents were incredibly busy with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with me. Also, my parents were struggling with two jobs and increasing expenses, they used to take me every day to the park to play and have fun. Thus, this creates lots of memories that last with me forever even though it was limited to few hours per day. If they push it hard to work on something related to school work, I would have nothing fun to related to my family.
In addition, Playing games have significant benefits to both parents and children. Among the most important benefits that we should recognise here are mental and physical benefits. A study conducted at The University Of California indicated that playing physical games like football or soccer ball for at least half an hour a day have incredible benefits to the human body. Parents who encourage their students to participate in a soccer game are more likely have healthier children. Nevertheless, playing soccer relieve stress that has been built up in both parents and children.
Admittedly doing something related to schoolwork is important for the children success. However, Parents who spending the very limited time asking their children to work on their homework or their school assignments can add tremendous stress on the children. In addition, parents should spend their time having fun with their children and leave the school related work to their student teachers.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that, even though children schoolwork should not be neglected by parents, parents should intelligently use their free time up to the maximum. Parents who spend time with their children create greater moments in their children mind and help their children to be physically fit and stress-free.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: There denying that parents play a significant role in their children lives.
Description: An existential there is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to There and denying
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and lives
Sentence: Parents can contribute to their children success by spending some time with them.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and success
Playing games have significant benefits
Playing games has significant benefits
Sentence: The basis of my views is because playing games and having fun can have a great impact on parents children's relationship and can have great benefits for both children and parents physical and mental health.
Description: A noun, plural, common, genitive is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common, genitive
Suggestion: Refer to parents and children's
Sentence: Fun has an indispensable effect in parents children's relationships.
Description: A noun, plural, common, genitive is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common, genitive
Suggestion: Refer to parents and children's
Sentence: If they push it hard to work on something related to school work, I would have nothing fun to related to my family.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and related
playing physical games like football or soccer ball for at least half an hour a day have incredible benefits to the human body.
playing physical games like football or soccer ball for at least half an hour a day has incredible benefits to the human body.
playing soccer relieve stress
playing soccer relieves stress
Sentence: Admittedly doing something related to schoolwork is important for the children success.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and success
Sentence: However, Parents who spending the very limited time asking their children to work on their homework or their school assignments can add tremendous stress on the children.
Description: A WH-pronoun, nominative is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to who and spending
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that, even though children schoolwork should not be neglected by parents, parents should intelligently use their free time up to the maximum.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and schoolwork
Sentence: Parents who spend time with their children create greater moments in their children mind and help their children to be physically fit and stress-free.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and mind
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2160 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.012 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.845 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 9, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... physical and mental health. Fun has a indispensable effect in parents-childre...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an hour' or simply 'hours'?
Suggestion: an hour; hours
...with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with me. A...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...h me forever even though it was limited to few hours per day. If they push it hard...
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Line 9, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n to be physically fit and stress free.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259179265659 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.157667386609 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0863930885529 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0453563714903 0.046263068375 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0755939524838 0.0685040099705 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114470842333 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0539956803456 0.0351676179071 154% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68592830286 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0410367170626 0.0309702414327 133% => OK
Particles: 0.00431965442765 0.00188951952338 229% => OK
Determiners: 0.060475161987 0.0887237588012 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0259179265659 0.0209618222197 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107991360691 0.0139019557991 78% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2636.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 428.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15887850467 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371495327103 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292056074766 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189252336449 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128504672897 0.112833075102 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68592830286 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467289719626 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.2252301216 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.450281214 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.8 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 50.6056074766 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.53488372093 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404371860472 0.300154397459 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13694783117 0.103427244359 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0850125957335 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528730529985 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152024558343 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152709904931 0.114077575197 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044465143241 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328752867812 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0863842122018 0.067059652881 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268146525201 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276256263347 0.0618886996521 45% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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