TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are busier these days than before, both father and mother have a regular nine-to-five job in most of the family. Thus, parents have less time to spend with their children. I believe that if parents have got some time, they should play games and sports with their children. The reasons for holding this position will be further explained in the following paragraph.
First, playing sports and games can create good memories. Often, people, including adults and children, view sports and games funnier than something they should do, such as their job or their homework. So, spending time playing sports and games with children will make them happier. The happier the memories the positive the bond is created between parents and children.
Second, play sports and games might create a healthier attitude in terms of what is more important in their life. When parents use their spare time with children on something fun, the children will learn that schoolwork, or academic things, is not the only aspect that parents care about, and therefore develop an attitude that there is not any single important feature in life. As a result, the children might hold a better balance between their job and the leisure life in the future.
Third, playing games and sports might be healthier. Students might already spend lots of time sitting in front of the desk doing schoolwork, so it would be healthier if parents take them out and doing something fun. Games and sports potentially offer benefits in both physiological and psychological way. As these kinds of activity are funnier (compare to schoolwork), they might reduce stress in children. In addition, sports, which trains the cardio and muscle, can make children physically fitter and stronger.
To sum up, I advocate that parents should take children out to play instead of staying in the house doing schoolwork. Playing, or doing something fun, offers a huge benefit toward both parent and children, which includes a positive bond between them and a healthier attitude, body, and mind.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11011904762 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42747516982 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514880952381 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9778546581 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3888888889 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326637093976 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112185747894 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101133412498 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192899883948 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582570192157 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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