TPO 44 Independent Writing TaskSome people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing thi

In my opinion, I think the approach that parents spent their time playing games or sports with children is better idea than another approach. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in following paragraphs.

First of all, parents can gain physical interaction with their children. Physical interaction is so important to parent-child relationship that every parent should cease all opportunity of playing sports with their children. My personal experience is a geart example of this claim. When I was a elementary school student, my mom and dad spent a lot of time playing soccer with me. Despite their skill of soccer was so poor, I still enjoyed the playing time with them. In addtion, I thought we were the happiest family in the world at that time.

Secondly, parent who play games with their children will construct the real friendship between herself and her child. A friendship which is bring by playing games together will develop to a real and robust bond, and the real and robust bond with child will follow positive and affective conversation. In my childhood, my parents spent much time playing games with me. Until now, I continuously consider we are the best friends. There is no obstacle for us to talk with each other.

Thirdly, it will bring more pressure to childen if their parents spent all of their leisure time doing things which are related to schoolwork. Children often felt tired after doing their homework. If their parents continues talking about things related to course, children may explode some day. I remember one terrible event in the past. When I was a senior high school student, I spent all my energy on studing in school. The only thing I wanted to was getting some rest time at home. My parents, however, did not lety me rest. So I exploded.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that parents should use their precious and scarce time to play game or sports with children. The reasons are

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, i feel, i think, in conclusion, talking about, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82985074627 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52337876861 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540298507463 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5358738844 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.347826087 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5652173913 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305253068566 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860718250489 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764280654956 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195802369124 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515640342455 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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