By and large, it is established beyond doubt families play a prominent role in all individuals life. Independency, is one of the most vital characteristic in a person due to it is combine with success. Some people believe that in past young people depend too much on their parents and now young people are better able to make decision about their own life, others disagree. In my view, young people now are better able to make decision about their own life for two important reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mention is that, once family was the only source that we can trust and talk about the most personally feelings and decisions, but now many other sources like psychological clinic and ... have been establish and we can talk to them about our desires. For example, when I was 15 years old, I had depression but I did not talk about it with my family because I knew that they could not help me. I went to a psychological clinic and visited a doctor. I can remember that I was extremely nerves and my hands was shacking but when I walked into room, the doctor smiled at me and made a comfortable contact that I suddenly understand that my stress just wiped out. As you can see, although families are one of the most important
Another reason is that, nowadays young people can be economically independence. This means that they necessarily need to listen to parents decisions. For instance, my brother was fall in love with a girl and my parents was not satisfied with the girl. I can remember that because my brother was working since high school, he did not listen to his parents and married to that girl. Another example I want to mention is that, I always want to have Xbox and every time I asked them to buy one of them, they disagree. So I decided to do a part time job to afford the price of an Xbox. These experiences taught me that young people have more self-esteem and they are able to make better decisions about their own life.
In sum, nowadays families are not the only source that we can talk about our decision, but also because of good economic they can be more independence, consequently in contrast of past, young people are less dependent on their parents and they are better able to make decision about their own life. I think we should all give independency to our young people because it let them grow and have high self-esteem which is one of the most vital role in this modern era.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...t families play a prominent role in all individuals life. Independency, is one of the most ...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'established'.
Suggestion: established
... psychological clinic and ... have been establish and we can talk to them about our desir...
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Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h families are one of the most important Another reason is that, nowadays young p...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'parent'.
Suggestion: parent
...that they necessarily need to listen to parents decisions. For instance, my brother was...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...em, they disagree. So I decided to do a part time job to afford the price of an Xbox. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, by and large, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.525 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50175559627 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465909090909 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9364169736 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.611111111 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00752822296703 0.236089414692 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00267634213442 0.076458572812 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0110348413105 0.0737576698707 15% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00664473612562 0.150856017488 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0115090205725 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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