TPO-45 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In every stage of life, people are needed to make vital decisions, and it is more critical for young people as they are in the best period of their life creating their own future. Young people require dependable sources to discuss and share their mindsets to reach greater solutions and decisions. Hence, a question can be raised in this regard that is whether young people have the ability to make decisions on their own or not. One standpoint states that in the current world young people can decide better about their own lives in contrast to the past when they depended too much on their parents. I concur with this idea and in the ensuing lines, I delve into two reasons to substantiate this point.
The first reason coming to mind is that because of our fast-changing world the lifestyle gap between parents and young people make it ineffective for young people to gain too much from them. The pace of changes in our world is increasing every year, and then you need to adapt yourself to the new different environments and even cultures. For example, in the past people had more time to spend with their family but in the current trend, working time and business issues take a longer portion of one’s life. Hence, work challenges are more serious than before. Also, the way people are connected to each other has changed significantly since technology improvements make a new culture of social behavior. As a result, young people can’t depend on old-fashion rituals that work for their parents in the past. To sum up, almost every aspect of daily life has changed, and therefore, young ones should make their own ways to cope with their issues.
Secondly, young people have access to a variety of source of information than the past and this opportunity makes it increasingly easier for them to decide on their own. According to the technology changes that make knowledge and information sharing possible through internet webs and social networks, young people can share their decision difficulties with others with the same age and concerns. Moreover, they can benefit from others’ experiences and decision-making criteria to reduce the probability of making wrong decisions. Take, for instance, you can speak to students of different universities to find out not only which major is more suitable for you but also which university is better in that field of study. In contrast, parents' advice is being more general about issues because of lack of information. When I asked my mother’s decision to study abroad, she said: “If I were you, I would choose the county which is more friendly and kind to foreigners” with no exact details and specifications.
In summary, all the aforementioned ideas bring us to the conclusion that young people dependency on their parents should be less than the past as things change very fast and technology provide a lot of available information for decision making. Thus, young people shouldn’t take this chance as a granted and do their best in making suitable decisions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in contrast, in summary, as a result, in contrast to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00589390963 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73334961661 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516699410609 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.4778172895 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.45 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491610443992 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160402908394 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965354743377 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339374397231 0.150856017488 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458168373748 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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