Celebrities are one of the most important part of the society. They bring honor to their countries and let people all around the world to be more enthusiastic to know about celebrities’ home town. It is no matter the age of the people is low or high, the matter is the way that they behave. However, some people believe that, celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes are devoted to special range of society while the others disagree. From my point of view, I deeply believe that the importance of celebrities does not have any correlation to their famousness and in what follows I will attempt to address the most discernible reasons.
First, different people judge celebrities in the basis of their interest. Accordingly, some people have deep enthusiastic in volleyball and other may like football and they follow their interest in their life part from the age that they are. My father is the best example regarding this issue. He told me about multiplicity of honor that he took in his young life for my country in wrestling. therefore, he is one of the most enthusiastic person in that sport that I have ever seen. Right know he is in his sixties and he never give up of following wrestling news. So as it is clear, people usually follow whatever they like in their career.
In the contrary, there must be some behavior which intensify hostility also among young people against celebrities. They may do some job that may bother all people including young one. This is the most abysmal characteristics that a celebrity can have and deteriorate his or her reputation. For example, last night I saw an advertisement in television. I was about one of the most famous person in football world that always felt sympathy to poor people. Accordingly, the clip applauds prosperous people to buy luxurious instrument instead of helping impoverished people. so, because of that clip, I never follow Messi, even though that I am young. That experience taught me that, celebrities behavior may be like double- edged sword and hurt their reputation.
Finally, some people believe that they have special ability and follow celebrities to help them heighten that specific characteristics. For instance, my mother is sixty years old and she is a dance tutor. According to her job, she must always be up to date and as a result of it most favorite program in her eyes is ballet dance sport. Therefore, your job may oblige you to follow special sport regardless of your age.
All in all, as the aforementioned examples have illustrated, celebrities can be followed by different types of person. Interest and job atmosphere is two important attribute that make people much more eager to follow their celebrities, however they may hurt their reputation by bad behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...young life for my country in wrestling. therefore, he is one of the most enthusiastic per...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'right now'?
Suggestion: Right now
...on in that sport that I have ever seen. Right know he is in his sixties and he never give ...
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Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
... know he is in his sixties and he never give up of following wrestling news. So as i...
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Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...instead of helping impoverished people. so, because of that clip, I never follow M...
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Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'attribute' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'attributes'.
Suggestion: attributes
...est and job atmosphere is two important attribute that make people much more eager to fol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95085470085 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86423873019 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502136752137 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5235034826 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1153846154 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175000916075 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498956580561 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405459841076 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109819221164 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261856722956 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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