Nowadays governments are usually engage with how to spend money on society and activity. Some people believe that it is better for government to invest money on arts, while the others think that it is worth to invest money on athletics. From my perspective, I deeply believe that government should spend money on sportsman and in what follows I will attempt to address the most discernible reasons.
First of all, the athletics can increase the popularity of the country in whole. An athlete may be as popular that people wishes to visit his home country and his culture. Take 'Cristiano Ronaldo' as an example. Around ten years ago, nobody knows anything about him and his home country. However, when the government of Portugal saw his outstanding talents, they invested a lot of money to increase his popularity. As a result, when he achieved his target and elected as the best football player, people all around the world started to know more about his country. Hence, investing on athletics will provide popularity to its home country and its society.
Moreover, in this approach all of the expenses such as the money government will spend on athletics will return to the society in a short time. For instance, the first and most powerful man in Olympic 2008, 'Hossein Rezazadeh', helped to his home country so much. Around 2004, Iranian government tried to invest money to cultivate his secrete talents. It took only four years. But, when he was elected as the most powerful man, all people around the world came to Iran to visit his home town and imported plenty on currency which is one the most substantial parts of the economies. What's more, the government announced that more than twice of the investment came into the country in a short period of time (six month). Therefore, this example has clearly illustrated how an athletic can provide a lot of opportunities to his country.
Finally, athletes will be known as the sample of societies and regular people tried severely to imitate them. This is a place where most of the expenses in healthcare would diminish. For instance in my country, a lot of people wanted to be as strong as 'Rezazadeh' and this conclude to a fabulous result. Indeed, based on the government announcement, the expenses of government in healthcare was lessen to half of its origin. Therefore, the health of whole society will be reduced by true investment.
All in all, as the above-mentioned examples have illustrated, it is valuable to invest money on athletics. Not only does it help to increase the popularity of the whole society but also it increases the government budget and health of people.
- TPO 1, Integrated Writing 3
- TPO 46 86
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 66
- Integrated TPO 44 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'engaged'.
Suggestion: engaged
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...society. Moreover, in this approach all of the expenses such as the money government w...
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Line 5, column 581, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ost substantial parts of the economies. Whats more, the government announced that mor...
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Line 5, column 690, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...stment came into the country in a short period of time six month. Therefore, this example has ...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...e country in a short period of time six month. Therefore, this example has clearly il...
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Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lessened'.
Suggestion: lessened
...xpenses of government in healthcare was lessen to half of its origin. Therefore, the h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89955357143 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67934419656 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484375 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9848394678 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4583333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163154200086 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490990896369 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488028790061 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967563118146 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566983885442 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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