Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that behaviors and thoughts of celebrities, who are usually present in various types of media, can greatly impact on people, particularly youngsters. Contrary to this belief there are those who still argue that the opinions of celebrities are not that much important to influence on young persons who are usually rebellious and do not listen to anyone except themselves or their peers!
However, I firmly agree with the first group and believe that thoughts of celebrities impact on people and youngsters usually are influenced by these thoughts more than older people.
To begin with, in recent years, everyone has seen that many teenagers wearing outlandish clothes which make them marked in the society. If you get close to these teenagers and ask them about their choice of clothing style, you realize that they are imitating a famous person and would like to be looked like him. Such choice of clothing style is not prevalent between older people who are usually in their 40s. This example shows how youngish people are easily influenced by celebrities.
Another significant fact which should be taken into consideration is that in political elections in each country, candidates compete to get the attention of celebrities. Political candidates are greatly aware that celebrities easily affect on young people and young people are really good at convincing their families who are usually older persons, in this way, the political candidates not only obtain votes of young people, but also they obtain votes of young's family members. For instance, in my country, there is a singer who is very popular between young people. Last year, at the time of the presidential election, this singer advocated one of the candidates, say A. At the time, my niece was a fan of another candidate but she easily changed her mind after hearing about supporting of A by her pattern. And also, I witnessed how my niece could convince her parents to vote on A as well! This example clearly illustrates that young people are more likely to be affected by thoughts and opinions of celebrities.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I am convinced that young people are more influenced by celebrities whom they are followers of. As a result, it would be great if celebrities scrutinize their behaviors carefully to not mislead a great number of people who are not that much experienced.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 234, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...e greatly aware that celebrities easily affect on young people and young people are reall...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, so, still, well, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08564231738 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75854178036 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513853904282 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.1226205494 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.214285714 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3571428571 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160396759927 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550778961659 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408710052188 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998364639005 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033779233542 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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