Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the significance of celebrities in a society can not be ignored. A controversial question which raises regarding this issue is which are the most receptive to their opinions, the youth or the elder generation. In spite of the fact that a concrete argument can be made to oppose the notion, I , on the contrary, concur with the idea that youngsters are more inclined toward their attitudes. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represent conspicuous reasons to elaborate my stance.
First of all, one should take into account this significant factor that celebrities select the state-of-the-art in every situation in order to stay foremost always. They appeal the youth more by this tendency. As a matter of fact, the more they are up-to-date, the more they are influential, for the most consumers of cutting-edge is the young generation of the society rather than older people. In fact, most of fashion styles, possessions, and recreational activities are informed to the society by celebrities. As a corollary of this, younger people have a robust penchant to those eye-catching themes and try to imitate what celebrities do. On the contrary, neither new technologies nor wealthy possessions are appealing for an old man.
Another equally noteworthy reason is that celebrities mostly concern the issues associated with younger people. For instance, it is broadly prevalent that a film directer underline the problems young people in a meeting than the issued of the elder people. Needless to say, celebrities mostly show their opinions toward the government's policy for young people. Since the young people clamor for their rights in the society, they will be subjected to the celebrities behaviors and attitudes in their problems. An intelligible statics revealed by a recently conducted survey demonstrated that about 70 percent of young people protest for their liberties due to the statements of famous people of the society. On the other hand, since there most concerns about older people are done by government , there is no fuss and no popularity for them in comparison to the youth issues.
In the end, with all being mentioned above, I am left to draw one single conclusion. From my vantage point, celebrities influence the youth more not only do they utilize the most attractive style of life, but also express a consideration about their current issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact, first of all, in spite of, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15113350126 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92116633061 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554156171285 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5066801665 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.611111111 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165799034341 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052669669544 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409476700153 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093642254607 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370745920943 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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