Decision making is a very important part of our lives. It often defines our future and our decision. Some factors can influence our thoughts. Some people think that opinion of celebrities are important to younger people than they are to older people; others disagree. In my view, an opinion of celebrities and athletes doesn't really matter for two important reasons.
The main reason is that their claims and ideas don't have enough support. Famous people are not specialist in different fields such as policy, economy, science, and society. they didn't sufficient amount of knowledge to debate on such topics. They often show a lack of basic knowledge, as a result, many people have doubt about their statements. For example, last month I saw a TV with a famous Ukranian showman. He claimed that Ukraine needed to spend more money on transport system by improving public transport system. In the studio were also specialists who denied his proposed and explained that it will lead to bad consequences such as raising the cost of a transport system. As you can see, opinions of celebrities don't have enough supports that are many people don't even listen to them.
Another important reason is that celebrities have a bad reputation. In my county, we have a lot of cases when celebrities had a problem with the law, most common was using drugs, but sometimes it was much worse. For instance, last week I saw a programme that discussed a famous, respectful, Ukranian singer. He was offended by violent crime. First, he drunk a lot of alcohol and used a drug. After that, he had got behind the wheel and drove his car and created a dangerous situation for passersby. His main crime was that he kidnapped a small girl and raped her. This shocking example convinced me that I shouldn't be influenced by their opinion.
In sum, though some may think that celebrities opinions are important to somebody. In my view, they don't. Not only because they are not familiar with some topic but also they have a bad reputation. Also, I think that as long as children listen celebrities it will cause a serious problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60183806452 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559556786704 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8905092694 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.92 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.44 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17214231181 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460947240274 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055414092432 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103240739833 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041657461332 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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