There are certain considerations and factors that everyone can take into accounts to investigate and examine necessary abilities for celebrities to affect people. I certainly agree that many celebrities like entertainers and athletes have a great impact into youngsters rather than old people. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
First and most, due to the recent technology and the accessibility to the internet, the youngsters have the ability to follow the famous artists and athletes. They have a great knowledge about their life and their work; and celebrities have a huge impact on them. On the other side, the old people like mam and dad do not like to use the internet and prefer to watch their movies only.
Furthermore, most of celebrities are young people and may be at the same age of me. In order to that, I'm very interesting to know all about their achievement. For example, Mohamed Salah, he is a famous Egyptian football player and he plays now at Liverpool team. I used to watch all his matches and follow his news and listen to his recommendations for the young people in how to be a successful person. I began to follow his performance and his ethics and I applied for attending Liverpool academy. In contrast, my father thinks that Mohamed Salah is ordinary player and his performance does not affect him.
Lastly, I think that youngsters care about the celebrities news and opinions because the lack of experience. For instance, my little sister fall in love with a well-known singer Nancy Agram. she used to wear, eat and even talk like Nancy. She always listen to her advises to girls in how to be a pretty attracted girl, also, she dreams to become a singer like her. But my mam hate Nancy a lot and said that she is vulgar and my mam have conflicts with my sister all the time about her new way.
Due to the aforementioned reasons, all folk should bear in mind that celebrities’ opinion and ways have a great effect into the youngsters’ life rather than old people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the celebrities') or simply say ''most celebrities''.
Suggestion: most of the celebrities; most celebrities
... watch their movies only. Furthermore, most of celebrities are young people and may be at the same...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...t the same age of me. In order to that, Im very interesting to know all about thei...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
... I think that youngsters care about the celebrities news and opinions because the lack of e...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...e with a well-known singer Nancy Agram. she used to wear, eat and even talk like Na...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'listens'.
Suggestion: listens
...at and even talk like Nancy. She always listen to her advises to girls in how to be a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, may, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76601671309 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80928023914 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529247910864 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8703869136 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0526315789 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0948001856083 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274982746629 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027632136788 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0542561705451 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184050524909 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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