There is no shortage of debate about whether it is more essential for young people to learn the ability to organize and plan or not at the recent complicated life. In my opinion it is better for the youngsters to have the experience to organize, plan and create. I feel this for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the progress and the influence of technology make the new world become so complicated. There is a great competition between the people to have the better job and the good carrier. So, the people should learn how to organize their day and put a schedule to able them to challenge the recent circumstances. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am married and I have two kids. Simultaneously, I work in a famous hospital at the scientific research department. In order to obtain higher professional career at my work, I have to exceed my academic qualification. So, I prepare for taking the doctoral degree, and really it is very hard for me to make all these duties between work, home and my study. Hence, I have put a schedule for organizing my day. At the morning I go to my work and finish my tasks first, then I take a permission from the manager to work in the laboratory for my research. while I am going to take my kids to accompany them from the school, I listen to the lectures as I asked my friends to borrow me their records. Then, that is help me to have the time to take care of my children. In addition to that, I used to cook the food from the night. Indeed, organizing my time gives my the chance to complete all my duties.
Secondly, the young people have the capability to plan and create more than the adults or old people. In order to that, the government should provides programs to benefit from their qualifications to compete the rapid advanced world. For instance, the ministry of education at my country prepares an educational scientific program at the summer. The program provides the sharing student with all the instruments and budget to create new inventions like design mobile applications for help the people to shopping online or booking for traveling or at hotels, as they have no time for doing this things.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better to teach the young people how to organize and plan, in order to make progress for their community and their live and carriers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 923, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...work in the laboratory for my research. while I am going to take my kids to accompany...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...In order to that, the government should provides programs to benefit from their qualific...
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Line 5, column 590, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... hotels, as they have no time for doing this things. In conclusion, I strongly be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57540603248 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71319493947 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480278422274 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0921085712 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6363636364 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169327871176 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544696807504 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560272987408 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135175228101 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668838767177 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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