Because popular people influence society a lot, most companies pay money for them to advertise their product. Even though there are some arguments on the celebrities influence more for young adults or not, I believe the impact of the popular people is more powerful on the youths.
Above all, most celebrities and famous people are relatively young because of the youths dominant in this society. Famous people tend to pay full attention to their family when they get older which makes them less popular. Moreover, most celebrities use social media such as Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter to represent their opinions. However, older people do not really actively using social media like younger ones. From my personal experience, from the social media, I got much information and I am the most informed one of the family. Also, older people have a stable job which leaves no time for surf on the internet.
Another reason is, older people already possess their own unique perspective on things, so, the opinion of the celebrity does not affect much. The experience of life build the mind of the people and I think it becomes more accurate as time passes. Moreover, because older people are more cautious, they probably not pay attention to others' opinions event they are famous or not. For example, before the presidential election of my country, some amateurs did an experiment about the opinions of people. Most of them do not trust the commercial on a television set and on the social media, they only vote based on the family and the knowledge of the candidate.
All in all, the influence of the celebrity on younger people is more powerful than it is on the older ones because of their mentality, lack of electronic device usage and their experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94612794613 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51818989916 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538720538721 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.5137463649 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.928571429 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187655385544 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706343927034 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453563390978 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117955917956 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464979687162 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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