Without any shadow of a doubt, in today's world, media and along with that celebrities plays an important role in youth life. Keeping this fact in mind, some people are of the opinion that viewpoints of famous people matters more to young people rather than older ones; however, some others might oppose this issue. I subscribe to the former group's point of view regarding this controversial issue, and the reasons listed below will strengthen my standpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that compared to the elderly, young people are more exposed to celebrities through social media. They spend most of their day surfing in the internet to become related to the world. To illustrate, my eighteen-year-old cousin, spends approximately eight hours of her day on social medias such as instagram or tiktok. She knows all of well-known people all around the world. While my cousin allocates a lot of her time for following famous people and being aware of what thay are doing, my eighty-year-old grandmother don't know even how to turn on a cellphone's internet. As you can see, unlike the youth, aged people neither knows most of world-wide celebrities nor matters their beliefs.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that according to their lack of experience, youth loves to make someone their idol. They are fond of creating heroes for themselves, and following others path to success; thus, who can be better than a prosperous person like celebrities. As an example, again my eighteen-year-old cousin is a big adherent of Black Pink music group. She watches all of their interviews and talks, and she tries to imitate them all the time. She even buys and wears clothes with their quotes on them, and she wants to be a singer in the future.
Taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that young people are more influenced by celebrities opinions than the elderly. That is because of the fact that not only are they more subjected to famous people in their everyday life but they also tend to follow their path and method of success and make them their hero.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, thus, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92737430168 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74683142231 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575418994413 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2770607352 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.25 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185921836915 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587279539776 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383194237087 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121497390073 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398595343817 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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