TPO 47 Integrated writing essay
The passage is arguing that whether large pterosaurs were capable of powered flight or whether they were able only to glide, the answer is no. But in the listening, the professor says they may capable of powered flight.
First, the writer suggest that the pterosaurs were probably cold-blooded, which typically have slow metabolism and are unable to produce lots of energy. And meanwhile the powered flight require energy. According to the professor, the pterosaurs may had fur just like the warm-blooded animals, which need lots of energy to maintain its warm during the winter. So it indicates that the pterosaurs may had the ability to fly.
Second, limiting weight of animals are required to kept the airborne by powered flight. And in the author's points of view, the pterosaurs that were as big as a giraffe which were probably so heavy. So that they couldn't fly because of their weight. But we can knowing from the listening that the pterosaurs had holly, light, unusual bornd, which means their weight are low enough to keep their airborne flying.
Third, all the animals with powered flight need stronge legs to take off from the ground, but according to the fossilized bones that the pterosaurs' back leg muscles were too small and weak to jump or run fast, mentioned by the writer. On contrary, the professor find the difference between the pterosaurs and normal animals that they use their lings to push off the ground to jump high, not only using the back legs. So that they may have the ability of powered flight.
- TPO 47 Integrated writing essay 3
- TPO 47 Integrated writing essay 70
- Directions: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typic 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ch were probably so heavy. So that they couldnt fly because of their weight. But we can...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'know'
Suggestion: know
...fly because of their weight. But we can knowing from the listening that the pterosaurs ...
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Line 7, column 418, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ump high, not only using the back legs. So that they may have the ability of powered fl...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1274.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 261.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88122605364 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38924450523 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521072796935 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0112622529 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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