There is no misgiving that nowadays, being organize plays the pivotal role in people's lives. No one can gainsay the effect of this ability on our daily lives. A controversial question which is often raised concerning this issue is that whether complexity of modern life bring about the need for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Some people may hold this viewpoint that it is essential for young people to have planing ability in our complicated and modern life. Some others, nevertheless, may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that young people without the ability of planing can easily manage our modern and complex life. From my own perspective, the first belief is true for some conspicuous needs which are pinpointed and elaborated in the following paragraphs.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that modern life make people busy. One have to work a considerable amount of his day time to can afford the cost of his family because modern life provide us with a lot of commodities which sometimes are expensive. Working a lot, along with the responsibility for family, make young people to be organized. Even , sometimes young people may be responsible for their old parents. All of these cases together require one to be organized as much as they can. Even though a simple example, imagine a young couple who has a child. Only when they work all day long, are they able to overcome the cost of their family. In addition to working, they require to plan for taking their child to and from her or his school. As you can see, everyone really need to be organized and planed.
Another equally important reason is that in modern life there is more competition. There are a lot of facilities in our modern society. Often, these resources are not enough to meet the needs of all people which means people would have to compete for the resources. To obtain the facility that one needs in an especial time, they should be organized. Again, as a tangible and simple example, one is required to be at work place on time. It is going without saying that everyone knows most people have to commute to get their work especially in big cities. To be on time at work, they need to know when they should be at train station, above all, they need to know when exactly they should be there. Because again obviously there are a lot of people who use metro because of it's the fastest transportation system in our cities. As you can see, had one not planned, they would have got their work lately.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that people particularly young people require to be planned and organized. Not only does modern life make people busy, but it also cause some inevitable and inconspicuous competition. All in all, the more one is planned and organized, the more they will be calmed in our modern life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... make young people to be organized. Even , sometimes young people may be responsib...
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Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'planning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: planning
...y. In addition to working, they require to plan for taking their child to and from her ...
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Line 5, column 774, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... lot of people who use metro because of its the fastest transportation system in ou...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...oder life make people busy, but it also cause some inevitable and unconspicuous compe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66003976143 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49538185195 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44930417495 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5105424946 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8148148148 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6296296296 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.37037037037 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.88709677419 368% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264655781758 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826415986736 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748633189213 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180914334323 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739305766625 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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