Without a doubt, most of the people would agree that organisation is the base of a successful life and need to be learned at young age, while some others may consider the opposite point of view and believe is not necessary. As far as I am concern, I deeply believe that organisation is key for a happier, healthier and successful life.
First of all, I consider life is very complex, not only for adult people, but also, for the youngest one. Today, a teenager's agenda could be so complex and difficult to follow as an adult one. In fact, a student in high school has to get credits for nine or ten subjects, plus social and volunteer hours. To illustrate this claim, I can bring up the example of my daughter. She has to improve her organisation skills to cope ten different subjects, multiple deadlines, and volunteer hours, to get good marks in her report cards. Considering that life is not going to be simpler in her future, it is clearly essential for her to have the ability to plan and organise.
Additionally, women has to face a double challenge in their life when time to take care of a family and a career arrive. Consequently, the organisation is crucial to manage such a demand of time and energy. Bringing back the example of my daughter, is evident the importance of improve her organisation skill by the time she become an adult with family and career. Thus, young people, and specially young girls, need to learn organisation and planification.
Finally, organisation means less stress, and less stress means better health. According to research from the Medicine Faculty of the University of Toronto, stress is associated with increments of illness and bad health conditions. Therefore, reducing stress in life improve health, and an effective way to reduce the stress, is by organising and planing the demand of a complex daily schedule. For instants, is very common to hear a doctor to recommend to patience to reduce their stress cancelling or taking time off his or her job to improve his or her condition. A good organisation can also provide more free time.
In summary, considering all the reasons exposed above, I, indeed, agreed that it is essential for young people to learn how to be organised not only for their future adult live, but also in their young live as a teenager.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
...ut also, for the youngest one. Today, a teenagers agenda could be so complex and difficul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in fact, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78054862843 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75564595277 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521197007481 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6607092884 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16673427045 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515515084263 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521935524958 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960999471484 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415863301635 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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