TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Friendship is an essential aspect of our lives. It helps us overcome hardships and enjoy our lives better in the company of those we truly like. However, there is a debate whether we should make new friends rather than maintain our friendship with our older friends. It has been proven that the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. This essay will demonstrate the virtues and merits of maintaining long-term relationships.

First, long-term relationships would be more beneficial than short-term ones. Because friendship could grow deeper and larger over time and friends could feel deep affections towards each other. For instance, I have tried to maintain my friends as possible as I could. Although it is a hard thing to do and you may face difficult situations that could easily break your friendship apart. I have managed to maintain my connection with a couple of my friends since high school. I'm still seeing Ebrahim for about 20 years, and we grew mutual interests over time. We both like photography a lot, and we occasionally catch up to retell our memories or discuss new technological achievements in the photography world. Sometimes we take a little trip to suburbs and venture into the wilderness. I have a couple of more friends that I really enjoy spending time with them. Through years, we came up with making greater bonds with each other. That was just a scratch on a surface of how keeping friends could be joyful and beneficial.

Second, short based relationships aren't going to last long. People often enter into short relationships to benefit few advantages. Let me elaborate this point by making an example. When I was going to IAUCTB to study architecture; I had numerous friends. We were all knew each other distantly, but we have respectable relationships. We called each other by names, and we had close connections. We had each other numbers and using them in exam periods. After we graduated from the university; our connections went cold, and we rarely have called each other. Moreover, after about eight years I barely remember their names. I have contemplated about the causes of this situation, and I realized that we were friends only because we had short-term mutual interests. We hadn't had deep connections, or we wouldn't discuss personal matters with each other. We were friends but only on the surface. That was a simple example of contrasting short-term friendships with long-term ones.

Maintaining long period of friendship is much more beneficial than finding lots of friends in short time. In a long period, you would get to know your friends and your mutual interests better, and this would give you enough reasons to keep your friendship. Your affections would grow larger over time, and you would feel closer to your friends every day. But short-term relationships; as I mentioned above and had been proven to me; isn't lasting. Thus, we should try our best to keep our old friends. No matter what.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is mo...
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Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than th...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...couple of my friends since high school. Im still seeing Ebrahim for about 20 years...
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Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...l. Second, short based relationships arent going to last long. People often enter ...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...by names, and we had close connections. We had each other numbers and using them i...
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Line 5, column 767, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
... we had short-term mutual interests. We hadnt had deep connections, or we wouldnt dis...
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Line 5, column 801, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...s. We hadnt had deep connections, or we wouldnt discuss personal matters with each othe...
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Line 7, column 434, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...tioned above and had been proven to me; isnt lasting. Thus, we should try our best t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, still, thus, for instance, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2572.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96525096525 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76632506668 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505791505792 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0736135485 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4857142857 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266985280979 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707108248368 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113476620531 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20291167309 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125070713676 0.0645574589148 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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