TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
With the increase in population around the world, we are facing a rise in demand for public transportation. In my opinion, nowadays, public transportation is a more vital issue than internet access to be considered. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, the improvement in public transportation can result in less air pollution. If governments do not provide an appropriate system of public transportation, the number of people who use their cars for going to their workplace or other places during the day will dramatically increase. In other words, this raise will bring about more usage of fossil fuels, which means more air pollution to handle. For example, ten years ago, in my hometown, there was only one route of the subway so that we always had to deal with high percentages of air pollution. However, after these ten years, the government has developed the transportation system, such as more routes for subways and more comfortable buses. As a result, today's surveys show that air pollution has gradually decreased in ten years.
Secondly, without an improved public transportation system, the traffic will be going to be a dilemma to solve. When in metropolitan cities there is no suitable public transportation which can facilitate people's daily transports, everyone finds the solution in utilizing their vehicles. In consequence, individuals have to get stuck in traffic for hours every day. For instance, in Tehran, people always have to cope with massive traffic because of the lack of available public transportation facilities around the city. Most of the people need to use their cars because there are not enough stations of busses or subway around the city, so if they want to use public transportation, they have to walk from subways or bus stops to their work for about half an hour. Not only there are not sufficient stations around the city, but also the number of available buses and subways is fewer than it is expected for a considerable population like what Tehran has, so each person has to wait long hours for getting on a bus. These are the reasons why most people in Tehran would rather use their vehicles, which causes traffic all over the city.
In conclusion, I believe that devoting money to public transport is a necessity for every country because it can reduce the air pollution and traffic of the cities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97777777778 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84201284956 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525925925926 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1851242907 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.588235294 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2941176471 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198359974449 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675808901709 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367752549287 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128128365872 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042287028094 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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