TPO 54: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's world, there are a lot of debates about the invesments of governments in different parts of communities. While some people believe that governments should focus on the arts and spend more money on this division, the others hold the view that the egovernment should invest more on the support of athletics team. Personally, I concur with the latter group's viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my standpoint are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the more money governments spend in support of athlets, the more people will inspire to attend in an sport activity. To elaborate, the athletics are one if the role models of people in a community; thus, if the government support the athletics the qulaity of athlets in the country will increased, and the country have significant number of winners in the international competitions. Therefore, in this situation, the society have a lot of athletics' role model which encourage the people to follow one of the sport's field. Besides, these more participation of the people in sport activities increase the health level of the community too.
In addition, most of the athletes in order to attend in international competitions need an sponsor because take parting in this rivalries costs a lot for the athlets. To elucidate, the dream of every athletics is to compete with the best persons on their field, and for making ready to participating in these high level's competitions, athlets should leave their occupations and focusing on the sport completely. Therefore, they do not have any incomes, and it is the duty of the government to support them as the sport elites in the community.
As shown above, considering all the reasons and the points mentioned, one may conclude that the government should pay more money to support the athlets. It is because that it inspires more people in the community to be active and participate in an sport field, and the athlets need more monetary support in order to take part in the interntional events.
- TPO 51Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO 30 63
- TPO 54: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 63
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- TPO 24 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 68
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06784660767 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9172087589 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480825958702 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.9307891484 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276040349558 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104132685921 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075747043785 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187586338343 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384964495226 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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