Art is related to human soul and art work during the human history was important for people's life. In my opinion spending more money in support of the arts would provide more benefit for the society rather than supporing just athletics such as state-sponsered olympic teams.
First, sponsering arts encourages people to get to know better about the arts and its crucial positive effect in their mental health. People always in their busy life forget about their soul and their mental health. By encouraging people to engage in artwork they feel less stressed and more relaxed. Research showed that people who engaged in artwork can speak about their feeling in their artwork which has healing effect. Therefore, supporting artwork would benefit the health of people in the society.
Also, we always are amazed by the artwork and try to use a peice of artwork in our home and environment. Even in the past people traded artwork and made money from their artwork. Not only the beaty but also the message that artist conveys with their artwork are meaningful and has great impression on us. Therefore, artworks apart from beaty have meaning and value which could be used as a busisness and support from government would flourish this business and helps many people to have a job other than making the arts.
Lastly, art increases creativity and we need creativity in our society more than before. Nowadays, everything is competetive and only creativity can helps us to build our future in this uncertain world. Engaging in artwork and supporting art means supporting creativity and future. Whenever we encounter an issue our creativity is our strenghth. Therefore, supporting artwork by government increases the creativity among people which would benefit people and the society.
In conclusion, although supporting athlete could benefit flourishing the sport and healthy movements, supporting art is much more important and has great benefit for the society and indivituals. Not only it improve mental health and creativity of people, but also increases the job opportunity and flourishing the business.
- TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation 70
- TPO 42 65
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
- TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 66
- tpo 30
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...lth of people in the society. Also, we always are amazed by the artwork and try to use a ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
... is competetive and only creativity can helps us to build our future in this uncertai...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whenever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...means supporting creativity and future. Whenever we encounter an issue our creativity is...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
...he society and indivituals. Not only it improve mental health and creativity of people,...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, so, therefore, apart from, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21238938053 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6114776184 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498525073746 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4423591969 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182498189576 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688722894968 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082060941435 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123748434432 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628716887121 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...lth of people in the society. Also, we always are amazed by the artwork and try to use a ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
... is competetive and only creativity can helps us to build our future in this uncertai...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whenever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...means supporting creativity and future. Whenever we encounter an issue our creativity is...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
...he society and indivituals. Not only it improve mental health and creativity of people,...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, so, therefore, apart from, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21238938053 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6114776184 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498525073746 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4423591969 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182498189576 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688722894968 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082060941435 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123748434432 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628716887121 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.