TPO Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors.
In the modern era, university professors play pivotal roles in training the future workforce of a country. As they have a crucial role in academic education and nurturing the generation who will run the wheels of industry in the future, it is important that they perform well at their work. In this regard, some people believe that to improve the quality of education, universities ought to spend more on professors' salaries while others don't adhere to this idea. From my vantage point, they deserve more salary and that would cause them to work better. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my view through two significant reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that sufficient amount of salary cause the professors to concentrate more on their work and there would be no reason for them to find another activity to make money along with their jobs. But, if they aren't given an adequate amount of salary, they may focus on other activities to make money rather than focusing on teaching or research activities. For instance, at my university, many professors tend to work in other places along with their job as professors. For example, they may lead other projects or hold some positions at other companies. This would cause them to devote less time to their work at university. As a result, students can't actually gain working or passing courses with these professors since the professors are not often present at the university or don't pay much attention to their teaching method. Did these professors receive more salary, they wouldn't work at other places and would dedicate more passion and time to their work as professors. Therefore, with insufficient salaries of university professors, the quality of education could be affected adversely.
Furthermore, if such jobs don't provide high salary, young people, who are really passionate about teaching and are really adept, lose their interest in becoming a university professor. They may consider finding another job which offers more salary instead of pursuing their talent. Consequently, a university's faculty would be occupied with other people are not knowledgeable and intelligent as them and students can't learn much in the classes and the education quality would definitely decline. In the long term, there would be negative consequences for the country as well since its workforce lacks the necessary education and knowledge about their own jobs.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that university professors deserve to have more salaries since they provide fundamental education for the future generation of a country. Although other aspects should be considered to enhance the quality of education, such as improving university facilities and labs, the fact that providing more salaries would bring about better performance of professors and employment of more qualified and talented professors, lead us to the conclusion that their salaries must be increased.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2507.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26680672269 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79637158727 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.583558365 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.947368421 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42105263158 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231114915697 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082337747049 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690616748211 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162882057654 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454959965929 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.