TPO05
do you agree or disagree with the following statement? people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Whether men and women should enjoy their time spending on whatever they like or do the things which are necessary for their lives is a really convoluted issue and has been a matter of argumentation among people for a long time. On one hand, some people agree with the idea of enjoying their lives since they claim that they do not live twice, so they have to benefit from it maximumly. On the other hand, others comply with the idea of working on the activities that are vital for them as it is a more beneficial thing, rather than wasting their time for useless hobbies. Personally, I acknowledge the latter suggestion in spite of the fact that the former is more appealing and has more aficionados. My answer for this debating bone of content is twofold. In the following, the rationale behind my choice will be elaborated by the most outstanding and solid proofs.
First of all, I uphold that doing and working on important tasks is one of the most significant and critical purposes of mankinds' creation; moreover, it is parents' duty to provide a better world for their offspring which is reachable by not wasting their time. Researchers have realized that children whom parents insist on working on important issues are more prone to be hired in senior positions. As an illustration, my brother always persuaded his son to read books, instead of playing non-beneficial video games. Thus, that kid gradually interested in sociology and continued his studies in McGill university. Now, he is one of the biggest gurus in his major. Conversely, my sister has always thought that the major porpuse of life is to enjoy it, so she never finished her studies and quited school when she was twenty-years-old. Unfortunately, she regrets her perceptions now, but it is too late for her to change.
Secondly, challenging ourselves by demanding tasks and jobs is more advantageous for both the society and the indiviuals, from the financial perspective. Scholars at RMIT university surveyed on diverse construction companies in Austrailia and disseminated questionnaires among their engineers as they wanted to know their contribution to their country. They found that the more those engineers are educated and hard-worker, the more income their companies have. For instance, AECOM as one of the biggest multinational companies in AEC (architecture, engineering, and construction) industry always seeks for well-educated adults insomuch as its managers know that this will be more profitable for them. Therefore, they encourage young students to study more on their majors in order to have better job opportunities in the future.
In conclusion, according to the abovementioned rationalizations and facts, people ought to work on important things instead of wandering around with unimportant jobs insomuch as this mindset leads them to better jobs which profits themselves and their societies. Furtheremore, they will develope and improve their generation by treating better children who will save their heirlooms. All in all, this content does not have a single answer although the justifications are mutually exclusive. There may be another explanation and trend to this subject since there are unlimited hypotheses for it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2711.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22350674374 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01808779151 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537572254335 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8034659987 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.227272727 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5909090909 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68181818182 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154425266675 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414144673699 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663199384508 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974295180618 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089871182754 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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