TPO11-Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others
think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
In this rapidly developing society, there are recent debates over whether getting access too much information is a good thing. Different people hold different views due to their distinct backgrounds and perspectives. Some people think that the internet provides us plenty of valuable information while others believe that access to so much information creates problems. As a matter of fact, the issue of information on the internet is so complicated and controversial that it is impossible to find a universal answer to this question. Nevertheless, I endorse that, to some extent, receiving too much information will produce some severe problems. The following argumentation can substantially verify my standpoint.
To begin with, when it comes to information, truthfulness is admittedly very significant. For instance, Johnny Appleseed, the name given to John chapman, planted large numbers of apple trees in what was the American wilderness two hundred years ago. Chapman grew trees and supplied apple seeds to settlers in the Middle Western Great Lakes area. Two centuries later, some of those trees still produce fruit. As a result of stories and poems about Chapman's actions, Johnny Appleseed became an American hero. However, some of the stories told about Johnny Appleseed over the years may not have been really true. They are actually part of the media-made legend. Someone wants us to believe, so they made up a story and posted it out through media. "lies, damned lies, and statistics" is a phrase popularized in United States by Mark Twain, who attributed it to the British Prime Minister Benjamin Disraeli: "There are three kinds of lies: lies, damned lies, and statistics." If we can only see those things on the internet in the future, information has nothing to do with truthfulness, what is the meaning for getting access to it?
Further, I want to point out that legitimacy is also an important feature of information. Take child pornography as an example, the explosion of social media networks and the rise of the camera phone have created endless opportunities for anyone to share their self-portraits with the world. However, since technology moves much faster than legislation, there is also a potential for crime committed via social media which shows selfies involve underage nudity or sexual situation, called child pornography. The proliferation of those pictures and videos have really bad impact on children but in nowadays children can get access to these easily through the internet. We should all pay great attention to it for the reason that child pornography is not only bothering children and their parents but also hurting the hope for the world in the coming future.
To sum up, I believe that living in loads of information will create problems more or less. Although information can be valuable for us in nowadays society, it requires us to be sensible and critical in order to use information wisely without getting into trouble.
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- TPO11-Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Othersthink access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? 90
- *TPO32-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...eseed became an American hero. However, some of the stories told about Johnny Appleseed ove...
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Line 5, column 595, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
... have really bad impact on children but in nowadays children can get access to these easily...
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Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ough information can be valuable for us in nowadays society, it requires us to be sensible ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, while, for instance, as a matter of fact, as a result, more or less, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24791666667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93582325076 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6944879421 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234609865577 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058070581472 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772510475557 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1308925804 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918556712256 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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