TPO24-2
The parents have been concern about children's future and have tried to guide them in the right ways. Their worries increase parallel with children's growing. They have attempted to expose them with the real life's troubles. I think one of these ways is finding part time job for the teenage children. I am so eager to say my point of view towards this issue.
One of the primary reasons is that part time job can enhance children's self-confidence. I believe that job help the teenagers to discover their skills and enforce them. Recognizing the talents is equal with rising self-confidence. Beside, we know that nowadays companies employ people who have more self-confidence and it is a plus profit of part time jobs results. For instance, my parents encourage me to go part time work when I were only 13 years old. I had been working in the building construction near the civil engineer for a 6 month. I taught like a little engineer and this sense improve my confidence and I said to myself, ''I will become a good engineer''.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider, part time job instructs us to manage our time and money. Time and money are essential factors and play undoubtedly role in the individual, family and society economies. Teenager learn to control them and find out their value in the work. It is beneficial experiment for them before start the real and full time work.
What is more, I would say that part time job involve the teenager with life problems and prepare them to cooperate with hard conditions. I think this is exceptional opportunity for the young people to face with problems in the work atmosphere and be familiar with them. This experiment will assist them to solve their difficulties more fast in the compare with others, which do not have any perspective about work’s problems and encounter with them for the first time.
All in all, if all the factors are completed, we can reach this conclusion that part time job is one of the effective ways to increase teenagers’ self-confidence, moreover, teach them time and money saving skills, also, prepare them for face with actual problems in the life.
- TPO 33-1 86
- Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 83
- TPO24-2 60
- Some people think it is an important part of a child s education to go on field trips for example museum other people think a child s time is better spent learning in a classroom at school 85
- TPO 28-1 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...s. I think one of these ways is finding part time job for the teenage children. I am so e...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y my point of view towards this issue. One of the primary reasons is that part ...
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Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... One of the primary reasons is that part time job can enhance childrens self-confiden...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...f-confidence and it is a plus profit of part time jobs results. For instance, my parents ...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...instance, my parents encourage me to go part time work when I were only 13 years old. I h...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...o a more subtle point we must consider, part time job instructs us to manage our time and...
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Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ment for them before start the real and full time work. What is more, I would say that...
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Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...work. What is more, I would say that part time job involve the teenager with life prob...
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Line 9, column 81, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...eted, we can reach this conclusion that part time job is one of the effective ways to inc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for instance', 'i think', 'what is more']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26213592233 0.229887763892 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.165048543689 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0679611650485 0.0866891130778 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0266990291262 0.046263068375 58% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0922330097087 0.0685040099705 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0995145631068 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0266990291262 0.0351676179071 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72686666832 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291262135922 0.0309702414327 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00242718446602 0.00188951952338 128% => OK
Determiners: 0.0849514563107 0.0887237588012 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0145631067961 0.0209618222197 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00970873786408 0.0139019557991 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2160.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 372.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8064516129 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.284946236559 0.338922669872 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.228494623656 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155913978495 0.174417080927 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110215053763 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72686666832 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532258064516 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 58.4626653178 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2338238341 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.644075263715 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 41.4494623656 45.7405998639 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.36752136752 1.45489161554 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103933125318 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720696440194 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515391026216 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179021763227 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.371689137145 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0237023001228 0.067059652881 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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