To gain a promising career in the future, the education of a kid is critically significant. It has become a prevalent phenomenon that nearly no parents wish their children to be left behind their peers. Thus, how to assist teenage children preparing for adult life raises hot discussion among modern parents. And some say one of the best ways is to encourage them to take a part-time job. From my perspective, I am deeply leaning towards the idea.
Firstly, there is every likelihood that adolescents could harvest valuable new skills and experience from a part-time job. By that I mean when they really have to undertake some tasks in the society, they will definitely acquire something which are not available in class, as it's required for them to utilize some employable skills. For instance, when a youngster serves as a waiter in a restaurant, his main task is to take down their customers' picks and deliver the dishes. Under such circumstance, he has to concentrate on his customers' requirements, carefully jot them down and finally give them the dishes without mistakes. What's equally important is that he is supposed to display politeness all the time even if some of requirements are rude. Therefore, he learns the techniques of controlling his temper, interpersonal skills and withstanding the exhaustion and monotonous assignments during the work. Suffice to say that the experience of a part-time job inculcates teenage children priceless knowledge about being adult.
Moreover, it is a good chance to build networking and expand one's horizons by doing a part-time job. Take the same example as above, when they young waiter is serving, he could grasp the opportunity to observe people's behaviors and listen to their talks. Sometimes, if his remarkable performance impresses some regular customers, it is possible that he is appreciated and then gets acquainted with them or even develop a desirable relationship with them. In fact, doing a part-time job provides a window for mentally immature children and youth to catch a glimpse of what the adult world look like, therefore adapt themselves to the realistic world and get ready for being a adult with some capabilities.
On the basis of above statements, to help their children prepare for adult life, parents should encourage their teenage children to take a part-time job.
- TPO23 – Independent: A/D? In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 90
- TPO24- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO21 – Independent: A/D? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 97
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, i mean, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13577023499 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91113933996 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579634464752 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.642120296 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.705882353 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348423241854 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109025549 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111123107522 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259363598954 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102872442473 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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