TPO25- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to many changes in today’s world, some people believe that youth do not dedicate enough time to their surrounding communities. Personally, I disagree with this thought. I feel this way for two main reasons, which will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people's lifestyles have been changed significantly due to various reasons, which technology is the most important and effective one, that can affect many aspects of life even how people work, communicate or behave. To be more specific, in today’s world any child is grown up with many different digital devices surrounding him from cellphones to laptops, so their mentality and how they think is different from their parents. As a result, their requirements and what they do would be in a different way that seems they have lower communication with other people. My brother's experience is a compelling example of this. He always prefers to be lonely in his room and play with his cellphone and PC in his teenage years. He grew up and chose IT major in the university because it was his favorite. After two years he initiates his new startup for online shopping that can be very helpful for people who are busy with their everyday work.
Secondly, despite recent decades, young people prefer to educate more and be experts in a specific field. Thus, it may take time and consequently, people can enter to a job market when they are a little older compared to their parents, so not only it never means that they do not allocate essential time for their society, but also it means that they started every job as a profession. For example, one of my friends started studying in university when he was eighteen and continue his education directly to a Ph.D. degree until he was thirty-one. After that, he initiated his professional job in an accredited company as an upper manager. Although he started his job about 5 years later than his father, he started it professionally. If my friend had not continued his education, he would not have had that job opportunity.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that youth dedicate the required time to their surrounding society but it may be in a little different form from their past generation. This difference is because of change in today’s lifestyle and profession.
- TPO48 Task1 70
- TPO27 Integrated Task 80
- TPO31 Integrated Task 70
- TPO26 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job Use specific reasons and examples to support you 70
- TPo 45 Writing Task 1 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...oday’s world any child is grown up with many different digital devices surrounding him from ce...
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Line 2, column 499, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... requirements and what they do would be in a different way that seems they have lower communicatio...
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Line 2, column 758, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'majors'?
Suggestion: majors
... teenage years. He grew up and chose IT major in the university because it was his fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90745501285 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78769935654 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54498714653 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0408069612 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.055555556 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153589997936 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050751546112 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476182820496 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104776473963 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454471624079 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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