Since the dawn of civilization, jos are played significant role in each society. Some persons prefer to contunie their family's job, some others take a radically different standpoint and open their own ways and conduct new business. I am with the second one and the lines below will shed on light my viewpoint.
First of all, the first reason which come to my midn is technology. Thanks to advance in technologies, the production has skyrocketed compared to last decades. The demand has increased small business vanished since they could not more product. It goes without saying that there is no future for small business in the modern times and near future. Therefore, I choose to be a high degree manager in a factory in the usa instead of being my business's boss in my country. Needless to say that it has no risk.
Secondly, In addition of the importance of advance in production tech, I believe that opinions and focus also changed between two generations. Millenials think different their opinion more based on computers system. For instance, my father and me have different idea to do our work. Both of us are engineer but we have different focus due to our IQ.
Last but not least, new generations have different preferences in their life. To clarify it, take may own experiences. My father used to have a hot dog shop. I do not have much memory with him since he used to work seven days in a week. you can able to have enjoyable time with your kids and wife if you are work in a company which gives you off days.
In conlusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough to corroborate my view. Having analyzed the reason, one can conlude that every individuals are different like five finger of a hand. They choose different jobs due to technologies, preferences and opinion. Parent should not force their kids to do same jobs.
- TOEFL TPO 11 - Integrated Writing Task 78
- Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. 70
- Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass window 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
...k different their opinion more based on computers system. For instance, my father and me ...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...e he used to work seven days in a week. you can able to have enjoyable time with yo...
^^^
Line 9, column 188, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'finger' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fingers'.
Suggestion: fingers
...ery individuals are different like five finger of a hand. They choose different jobs d...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74769230769 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64516260504 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593846153846 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0439072631 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.1363636364 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7727272727 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200605132723 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518685906041 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689751190342 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110738842661 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572500876491 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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