TPO26-It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
public transportation is very important part of our society. In modern city, time is very important, therefore the way of transportation could save our time. public transportation is one of the best way for all the people. Some people say that governments should spend more money on improving roads and highways, while others believe that public transportation should be expened more money by governments. In my view, it's better spend more on imporving public transportation than raods for two noticeble reasons.
First, expense will decrease dramatically. When public transportation is improved, people do not use their vehicle. As over time, utilization of fuel dwindle due to impact on aggragate of expense. For example, statistics show that one fifth of expense in big city relate to type of transportation. In order to demenatrate this, they contrast two huge cities, tehran and asfahan. In tehran be developed more bublic transportation, while in asfahan be improved more roads. Actually, in tehran there are a lot of buses, trains, and subways, transporting a large number of citizens. Amazingly, a bus consumes only 42 liters fuel, transpoting 30 persons, however a personal car consumes 200 liters, transporting 5 persons. if government improve more public transportation insteand of roads and highways, expense will decrease significanly. As you can see, improving public transportation is beneficial for society.
Second, bublic transportation will decrease air pollution. one subway can transfer huge number of commuter who need to move much more than other people. if governments invest in public transportation and improve its quality, all people persuade use these vehecile. therefore, by reducing fuel consumption, if fact, air pollution will be more heathly. For instance, once I live in tehran in two decads ago, air was very polluted. Mayor's Ahvaz offerd a lot of suggetion for this problem such as development of vegetation all over of city. this solution, however, was temporary and after only a few month they decided to develop public transportaion. Early, people may have used their cars, but finally they convicined to use public transportation because of convenience of them. Surpirizingly, this strategic for pollution air solve issue, decreasing pullotion in a few weeks. this experience taught me that improving public transportation influence on our environment.
In sum, improving public trasportation is better than improving roads and highways. Not only do expenses decrease dramatically, but also reduce air pollution significantly. government should try to solve problem of public transportation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 8.0752688172 421% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5459057072 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2833613377 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550868486352 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.473804778 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8214285714 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3928571429 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.67857142857 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0483322739083 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0163354852943 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0201349205704 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0353100919291 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00835353278896 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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