Tpo40 integrated writing
The reading material is talking about why it is impossible for a permanent station to be maintained on Venus. Yet the professor in the listening material believes that if the station remains at a height about 50 km from the surface of Venus, all these problems can be solved.
First off, the author shows the fact that pressure if the Venus is so big that all of the spacecraft as well as any other things send by human will crush. However, the professor opposes that. She includes the basic physical fact that pressure will be lower if height is greater. The professor argues that pressure at the location of 50 km high from surface on Venus will be roughly equal to the normal pressure on Earth according to this law. In this way, danger of crush will disappear.
Secondly, the writer holds the opinion that no water vapor or oxygen exist in Venus’ atmosphere, so these things must be supplied from Earth, which defeats the purpose of maintaining a permanent station. Nevertheless, the professor points out that using the carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid on Venus, water and oxygen can be made through some chemical process. Hence, we can apply chemical materials that are quite easy to get from Venus’ atmosphere to produce water and oxygen rather than getting them from Earth.
Finally, the article says that Venus’ thick cloud blocks most of the sunlight, without enough sunlight, we cannot get electricity from solar cell to power our equipment. Nonetheless, the professor’s opinion is that at the height of 50 km, cloud will be less thick and a large amount of sunlight can pass though it. Moreover, the cloud below the station can also reflect some light. By using both the sunlight from above and the reflected light from below, we can generate enough electricity to power the station.
To summarize, holding the station at the height of 50 km above the surface of Venus, conditions will be quite suitable for us to colonize on Venus permanently.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...at pressure if the Venus is so big that all of the spacecraft as well as any other things ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, well, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92284866469 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59340730148 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522255192878 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1756940865 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.6 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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