TPO46
Today, because of being in the digital age, people have almost different opinions relative to the people who have lived in the past. In addition, these views among younger people are more than older people, then those are more important for them. Although there maybe exist some old people that these goals are important, in total for young people is more crucial.
First of all, the young people are at the growth age, then, on this path, they need a hero to follow. The young people always look for a hero who is arrived at the highest level of success; hence, because of being at the technology age, the communication instruments introduce the famous persons such as athletes, actors, and actresses, as their hero, to them. For example, I have a friend, who is 23 years old, and he always follows the famous persons Instagram's page, see their photos, read their biography and also research in their individual life. I asked him, what is your goal by following them?, he responded to me that I am looking for a hero to determine my life path.
The age difference between young people and celebrities usually is less, then their opinion relating to the age is closer to each other. They are living not only in the same society, but also in the same age; hence, undoubtedly their opinions influence more on youth rather than older people. In addition, their thought is very close such as thinking about life, world, political events and even type of wearing style. Psychological research shows that when two people's age and view is not very distance, they are going to accept each other opinions naturally, whether they are a friend or not.
Finally, the technology has developed during the recent years, as a result, a lot of new instruments are created and designed like mobile, laptop. In addition, the most users of these instruments are young people, who have created a strong connection with them, then they are more in contact with famous people and their opinions. For example, Instagram is a mobile application that almost a number of celebrities use it, and daily they share their opinions with their fans about vary issues. Furthermore, the young people by using this application and read the views, automatically are affected by them.
In summary, even though the maybe the older people be the celebrities’ followers, the young people contact more with them and their opinions. There are several reasons in order to be the opinion more important for youth such as research due to finding a hero, approximately the same level of thought and contact more with them by using the digital instruments. There is a famous quoted that says, "Humans are the production of their opinions and heroes".
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| 2019-11-24 | shrjhn1234 | 80 | view |
| 2019-10-02 | SinaSina | 3 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is usually
...ce between young people and celebrities usually is less, then their opinion relating to th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, then, for example, in addition, in summary, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91341991342 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58312816448 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478354978355 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.9736440431 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.111111111 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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