Nowadays, as the proliferation of population, the stress in front of modern citizens is increasing. From my own perspective, my favoriate means of entertainment is to stay alone. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
First of all, in my view, the pressure mostly comes from the competition with others. The limited matirial conditions contributes to the intense competition, which is worsen by the great sum of population. And the competition makes life harder than ever. So I think the key to getting relaxed is to avoid competition, at least for a moment. My experience is a sad example of it. I come from China, where all of students have to challenge a very curel exam before attending to a college. I felt pretty stressful during my high school years, since I had to spend 12 hours a day to reviewing my course-work. And we had series of simulating tests, which seem endless and made me nearly get depressed. However, I need to underline that my grades were pretty good, which made me rethink about the source of my pressure. The conclusion is clearly: competitions and comparisions.
Secondly, undoubtedly, socialization makes up human-beings' essence. Meanwhile, every person needs alone time. Nobody could thoroughly understanding you, no matter how they endeavor. For example, Steven King, a famous novelist in this era, prefers lock himself in his small room when he is creating literatures. The reason for the little wierd behavior is that he holds an opinion that loneliness could stimulate his inspirations, which is of vital importance for writing. And he contends that keeping alone could protect his broken soul from the outer world.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that the best way to get relaxed is to be alone. This is because avoiding pressure for a while could cut off the source of pressure. And because alone time is necessary for human-being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
...es to the intense competition, which is worsen by the great sum of population. And the...
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Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'understand'
Suggestion: understand
...eds alone time. Nobody could thoroughly understanding you, no matter how they endeavor. For e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, at least, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98136645963 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97661370652 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621118012422 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6877691375 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9090909091 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6363636364 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126829309797 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361668105619 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567918518816 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860167093761 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554724788381 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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