Some people think that young adult should live with their parents for long time because they can get right guidance, financial help and so on. Others believe that staying with parent for long time by young ones is not good for them because they always will depend on their parents and they will not learn how to tackle problems individually, so I would like to prefer first viewpoint because there are many reasons behind it which will be discussed in this essay below.
One of the primary reason is that parents have experience of their life and they know what is good and wrong. When young adult cannot take right decision due to lack of experience then parents can play vital role to provide them good direction. For example, if parents are farmer then they can teach their children how to do agriculture if young adult want to become farmer.
Second, young adult can maintain their relationship with parents long time when they live together because they share their difficulties with each other and then parents helps to tackle those problems. For example, if adult live independent long period then slowly slowly disconnect with parents because attachment will decrease and relationship may be weak.
Third, Living with parents for long time increase more safety and confort. When young adult stayed long time with their parents then they feel always safety and security because parents cannot harm their children and they always give the blessings for their long life and young adults also feel comfort.
Forth, adult can take financial help if they live with parents for long period. For instance, parents earns money all life and they do saving for their remaining life; therefore, if adult need money then they can take money from their parents strait way and then adult can use that money for their study, business and so on.
In conclusion, I would like to say that living with parents for long time is not only safe for young ones but also increases the more attachments and emotions with each other. Moreover, adults can take proper guidance free of cost from their parents .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'depend'.
Suggestion: will always depend
... ones is not good for them because they always will depend on their parents and they will not lear...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e and they know what is good and wrong. When young adult cannot take right decision ...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: slowly
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: .
...guidance free of cost from their parents .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90449438202 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14717530532 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457865168539 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.8434359558 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.307692308 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3846153846 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0214211489536 0.236089414692 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0107510363495 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0145084825588 0.0737576698707 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0146402308541 0.150856017488 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.012238154131 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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