What would you change to improve your health?
1. Food quality 2. The amount of exercise in your life 3. The amount of stress in your life
Some people think that increasing food quality or decreasing the amount of stress is better to improve health rather than increasing the amount of exercise, while others do not. If forced to choose one over others, my resolute standpoint is definitely line with increasing the amount of exercise. There are several reasons as follows.
First of all, exercising can help people improve their physical health. When people’s bodies heat up during exercise, their bodies are likely to generate more white blood cells. An increase in more white blood cells could strengthen the immune system. For example, my youngest brother used to be overweight and lazy. Although he tried to eat vegetables to get a healthier eating habits, the effect was temporary. Also, even though he mediated thirty minutes every morning to mange his stress level, he could not solve his fundamental health problem. However, he could improve his physical health after he increased jogging time every morning from thirty minutes to an hour. As a result, he could lose weight and even gain some muscle mass with a higher resistance to diseases.
In addition, when people do exercise, it can contribute to an increase in their mental health. Since exercising takes lots of energy, it can help them to improve their shapes, and thus they feel confident about themselves. A higher confidence prevents them from feeling inferior to others. For instance, when my sister was in high school. She often felt depressed and powerless thinking that she was not attractive. However, she could get over such feelings by losing twenty pounds through enjoying tennis. By doing this, she could see positive results she contributed to. Naturally, many people around her started to respect her, allowing her to be confident, optimistic, and strong.
All in all, I strongly believe that the advantages of increasing the amount of exercising far outweigh those of other options such as food quality and managing stress level for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'choosing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: choosing
...xercise, while others do not. If forced to choose one over others, my resolute standpoint...
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Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lined'.
Suggestion: lined
...s, my resolute standpoint is definitely line with increasing the amount of exercise....
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Line 13, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for the reasons I have mentioned above.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20731707317 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56397726241 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606707317073 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3713366958 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115908963276 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319704724799 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506584992612 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886987899961 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529252958484 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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